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sing me your rhapsody
send through me waves of ecstasy
around and around we go

the ripples flow by
remnants of the waves
that ravaged us yesterday

a deathly cold encircles you
your words trickle by
falling sourly to the ground

your smooth steady breath
flowing over my skin
a secret frosty silence engulfs

Lips frozen shut
eyes opened wide, we watch
as the years go by and by

we are hidden here
away from the mob
where bleeding hearts may seek

you and i alone, frozen in silence
as we turn around and around
waiting for our rhapsody
©2003-2010 ~maakia
:iconmaakia:

Author's Comments

i wrote this about someone who i have a very twisted and messed up realtionship with.

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:iconchdani:
Nice way to express a relationship....as a dance...as a raphsody...

great work
:iconmelliegurl2005:
nice poem. . .good imagery

"Lips frozen shut
eyes opened wide, we watch
as the years go by and by"
^fav part
:iconwhoisphillip:
i like it

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who knows?
:icongraeflame:
really great, good description, grat main idea. ill keep checkin' up on you to make sure you do good work *which u allways will*
once again, great job



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Euh. Nothing matters anymore, does it?
:iconsapphirepirate:
I agree with all of the other comments.
I very good way of expressing yourself through a rhapsody stylee.
Yet again another fantastic expression of emotion!
Well done.

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Is it O.K. to be confused in my constant state of perplexion?
sapphirepirate
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"Live as if you were to die tomorrow. Learn as if you are to live forever."
:iconillamo:
I like how your poetry seems so incredibly understandable to any random person, and yet all in the same contains so much depth for those who want to delve a bit deeper, it's really splendid.
:iconmiseryofpride:
I love this poem. It's powerful and I love the structure...especially the last few lines

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Here I wait, my anger ready and my heart a blaze, come in if you wish to taste the physical sensation of my pain

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April 7, 2003

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